Write that Essay #3

The Power Sentence

If you waffle a lot, try to start your sentence with a power statement of 12 words or less.

Example:

• Money is the route of all evil.
• What is right isn't always popular.
• Hard work leads to positive results.
• A good leader leads by example.
• Those who strive for the highest place will rise the highest.
• What goes around, comes around.

The 'Red, White and Blue' Sentence.

Use this sentence style when you have several ideas to convey about a topic.

Examples:

• Successful students are focused, hard-working, and punctual.
• The Earth's key resources are clean air, fresh water, and the natural environment.
• Sunshine, water, and friends make for a perfect weekend adventure.
• Confidence, trustworthiness, and motivation are what makes a good leader.
• Resilience, hard work, and dedication are what make a successful person.

Independent Task

Task #1

Screaming, the children ran out of the cave.

Lurking in the shadows, was the ghost of the coffin man.

Signaling for attention, Sam felt invisible.

Observing the area, he found the corpse of the coffin man.

Task #2

Whereas I eat healthily, my brothers eat junk.

While he was running, he got a stitch.

When the fire alarm went off, the children panicked.

What goes around, comes around.

 

Task #3

Emerging from the depth, the monster sought its new prey.

When the baking was complete, the ovens were cleaned thoroughly.

Committed to improving their routine, the dancers trained daily.

Overpowered by the wave, the swimmers were swept off their feet.

Analyzing the situation, the commander decided the hill route was the best.

While we were watching the experiment, the paper ignited.

Hoping to improve his score, Matthew studied his times tables daily.

With their friends and family watching, the students took to the stage.

Undaunted by the work, the builders pushed on to repair the house.

Write that Essay Sentences

The 'W' Sentence - makes the sentence sound thoughtful and knowledgeable

Remember the rule: Not every 'w' word works as a sentence starter. Remember to put the comma in when the parts affected by your 'w' word are finished.

Examples - who, while, whereas, when, where, what, whilst, with.

With his trusty sword, he slayed the beast.
What goes around, comes around.
When the fire alarm went off, the children walked calmly to the assembly point.
Whereas I am athletic, my brothers are lazy.
Whilst my class was reading books, I fell asleep.
What others found boring, I find interesting.
While he was running, his shoe came off.

Write that Essay Independent Task

Task 1:

1. Unfortunately, he didn't make it.
2. Enthusiastically, she played with the toy.
3. Surprisingly, he finished his work on time.
4. Often, the students would scrape their chairs.

Task 2:

1. Under the bridge, there lived a troll.
2. Behind the door, the answer awaits.
3. On his head, the bird perched.
4. Among the children, there was an impostor.

Task 3:

1. Silently, the cat stalked it's prey.
2. In 1975, a high school was finally built in Hornby.
3. Amongst the papers, I found my homework.
4. Anxiously, I awaited my test results.
5. Fortunately, the kai today was something good.
6. About twenty years ago, a law was passed that changed everything.
7. Often, the things we say and the things we mean are two different things.
8. Cautiously, he knocked on the principal's door and await a reply.

The '-ing' Sentence

Use the -ing version of the verb e.g to run - running

Remember the rule - When you finish your -ing phrase, place a comma, then write the rest of the sentence.

Examples: listening, watching, running, realising, emerging, grasping, speaking, analysing, signaling, exposing, gossiping, acknowledging, stalking, galloping, spectating, yearning.

Realising the danger, people fled from the cities.
Shaking away the nerves, he walked towards the microphone.
Acknowledging the speaker, he bowed his head in silence.
Stalking it's prey, the feline pounced from the bushes.
Galloping through the forest, the horse avoided obstacles.

Spectating from the crowd, I noticed the team's ace.

Yearning for air, I rose to the surface.

The '-ed' Sentence

Use the '-ed' version of the verb e.g to jog - jogged. This makes for a punchy start to your sentence.

Remember the rule - When you finish your '-ed' phrase, place a comma, then write the rest of the sentence.

Examples: Frustrated, surprised, excited, committed, undaunted, determined, overpowered, concerned, cornered, delighted, enthralled.

Determined to win, Tony pushed himself to the last metres of the sprint.

Concerned for the welfare of others, the Prime Minister passed new laws.
Frustrated by the ongoing rain, I stared out the window.

Undaunted by the amount of work, the workers worked tirelessly.

Enthralled by the adventure, the girl ignored the icy temperature.

Enchanted by the show, she went to make her own.

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 The Adverb Sentence:

Adverbs describe verbs. Adverb sentence starters add interest or intrigue to our work.

Remember the rule; When you start a sentence with an adverb, place a comma after the adverb then write the rest of the sentence.

Examples: Surprisingly, Confusingly, Firstly, Remarkably, Often, In addition, Excitedly, Shockingly, Successfully, Simply,  Similarly, Significantly, Hastily, Skillfully, Thankfully, Fortunately, Accidentally, Successfully, Confusingly, Magically, Happily, Joyfully, Daily.

Firstly, she made the batter.

Skillfully, he flipped the batter on the pan.

Thankfully, he returned the ring.

Simply, he had to do his work.

Hastily, he finished the race.

Surprisingly, Sam finished first.

Fortunately, everyone was safe.

Accidentally, he flipped the bottle on the cap.

Successfully, he jumped on to the platform.

Confusingly, she grabbed my leg.

Joyfully, she skipped to the playground.

Daily, the newspaper arrived before breakfast.

The Preposition Sentence:

A preposition gives location or movement.

Remember the rule; when you start the sentence with a preposition, you need to put a comma when the movement or position ends.

Examples: In, against, between, over, behind, within, under, below, at, for, throughout, near, about, above, up.

In the beginning, we talked a lot.

Throughout the lesson, I tried not to fall asleep.

Near the basketball court, is the rubbish bin.

Behind the tree, the boy hid.

Below the deck, the ball was stuck.

Under the sea, there was a sponge.

Between lunch and dinner, we played football.

Near the village, there lived a witch.

For your information, eating is not allowed in the gym.

Within the school grounds, students liked to smoke.

P.E doesn't waste student's learning time (Brainstorm)

 In hurumanu 1, we have been asked to choose a topic and write an essay about it. I chose a topic which read; P.E wastes students' learning time. I decided to write an essay disagreeing to that argument. Here is my brainstorm for what I'm about to write.

Types Of Government

In hurumanu 2 we have been learning about different types of government. We also learned about how they treat people and how it impacts them. This is a slide of my work.

 

Abraham Lincoln 1 minute speech

 Abraham Lincoln

Abraham Lincoln, the sixteenth president of America, the person to end slavery, surely you’ve heard of him. Anyway, I am here to tell you about how Abraham Lincoln became one of the most influential leaders to ever live.

Abraham Lincoln was born on the 12th of February 1809. In 1861, he was elected to be the 16th president of America. The Civil War started on the 12th of April 1861 between the United States and the Confederate States of America. Lincoln had one thing in mind, and that was to end slavery. In 1863, he issued the Emancipation Proclamation which declared that all slaves shall be free. The Civil War ended on the 9th of April 1865 with Lincoln being victorious.

April 14th 1865, Lincoln goes to the Ford’s Theater where he became the first president ever to be assassinated.

Despite the difficulties, Lincoln believed that he could make a positive change in the world. Abraham Lincoln is resilient, committed and responsible. He showed these qualities until the end. That's what makes him an inspirational leader.

10 minute task- Are there any real pirates left on the world?

 When you hear of pirates, the first thing you think of is probably people steering big ships, shooting cannons and singing wicked pirate songs. You probably think that they don't exist anymore, but today I am going to talk about modern day pirates.

Piracy is an act of robbery or criminal violence by ship or boat on another ship. Modern day pirates steal cargo and other valuable goods. Instead of swords and other old-school weapons, these pirates use guns. 

Pirates as you know, wear eye-patches, uses cannons or swords, but the reality of modern day piracy and it's bloodshed is much more terrifying.